Reflection

What people like:

• “Be a yeller, not crier”
• Speaking in first person
• The other characters (The mothers remorse character)
• The teacher calling CPS was very accurate which is good, and rafts up tension
• The relationship between Claire and Sean
• How relatable Claire is

Suggestions:

• Fix how fast Mr evans reports the abuse
• Written the poem on her own and  misplaced it, or teacher found it 
• Humanize the character 
• What made the father abusive/ his back story
• Change how Claire wrote the poem
• Background on Wes and their dynamic/Relationship 
• Describe the bond Wes and Claire had 
• Delete the last sentence and a half and end with “What about me?”
• Work on Ending 
• Bring in CPS more 
• Figure out more in the ending 

Questions:

• One of the questions I had was that if the pacing worked? Even though it is a short story I wasn’t sure if I moved too fast with it and if It made sense. 

• Expand on parts in the middle
• Expand on parts that feel rushed 
• Have the pacing go with the seasons to have go over a couple months other than a couple of days